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Latest comment: 12 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion

lead

Critics thought Nijinsky did more posing than dancing. - Who is that Nijinsky? The man who was responsible for the drop?

Done

Background

Both were great successes. - That needs a reference.
He hoped that... - Also needs a reference.
It was one of six new ballets for 1911. - Does that mean that world-wide only six new ballets were planned for 1911? That would surprise me. A reference would be good.

Done

He based some of his ideas for the ballet - That needs a reference.
Prince Lieven - Who is that? Not worth a link?

Done Brief explanation for context.

First performance

Is that whole section based on the one reference at the end? - If not, the first sentence should be referenced.

Done Based on one source.

Same as Both ballets were failures.

Done

Actually, like every sentence should be referenced if not covered by the reference at the end of the section.

Done Reference at end of section.

Quite the same situation for the next section.

Done

Story of the ballet

curtain should be linked.

Done

Also things like snake, ceremony, sky etc.

Done

They lead The Young Man out and ready The Young Girl for death. - While that sentence looks simple, it isn't. The "ready" makes it a bit hard to understand on a first read. Can that be re-phrased?

Done

tames isn't really simple.
to drop - I think to go down or something would be simpler.

What people thought about the ballet

It has not been staged again. - It has really never ever been staged since then? That is an amazing fact.

Done True, it was only staged a few times.

Can you get for all the books in the references section and further readings section the ISBN number. That would look better. The template at the bottom looks a bit weird. Why do some parts there end with a dot and one not? Is the template not completed yet? If so it should be completed.

Overall a nicely written article. -Barras talk 21:35, 5 August 2012 (UTC)Reply

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