Talk:1st Provisional Marine Brigade

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1. It was started, not It started The brigade is the target (someone started it) not the subject (it didnt start something)
2. The day it was founded is not known, but the day it got disbanded is- Two points. 1. this comment really is not needed. Just provide the known dates where available. Including that the found date is unknown could be used but not nessecary. The fact that the disbanded date is known is certainly not needed, just list it. and 2. The info box lists a formed date.. is it known or unknown? Also "the day it got disbanded is." Is <what>? Do not leave the thought hanging.
3. Still, the 1st Marine Brigade existed and fought. Not needed. If it did not exist, there is little need for an article and it is normally expected for military units to fight.
4. They had 40 years of fighting. The brigade existed for 40 years. They did not fight the entire time. ie 24/7/365
5. They were first founded in 1912 - this was just stated in the last paragraph. No need to repeat it until a later section
6. to fight in the "Negro Rebellion" in Cuba, then they fought in World War II in Iceland and Guam with amphibious attacks, meaning that they used ships to land. - So many things.. thats a long sentence. split it up and link Negro rebellion, Cuba, Iceland, Guam and amphibious attacks (amphibious attacks or amphibious attacks)
7. After the war ended, they later fought in the Korean War. After and later are repetitive.
8. They quickly were reformed and reactivated during 1950 for the Korean War, they would help troops in the Battle of Pusan Perimeter, as well as other battles around the time. Again, sentence length. Also, it was never mentioned that they were disbanded so how were they reformed and reactivated? in not during. Link Battle of Pusan Perimeter. Around does not match with time. Here during would actually be the better word.
9. They were disbanded on September 13, 1951. This matches the first paragraph (could lose the first and just keep this one..so close together, both are not really needed.) The two do not match the info box. It says Sept 13. 1950.

Thats just to opening section.. Look at sentence size, term linking and match thoughts together while removing unneeded thoughts throughout the rest. Also separate the brigade (it - singular noun) from the members of the brigade (they - plaural noun) Pure Evil (talk) 03:10, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

I just wanna comment, really "they existed and fought"? What's the point of writing about a Marine Brigade if it didn't fight or even exist? Why write about Micheal Jackson if he didn't sing or exist? What is that sentence? Angerxiety 16:16, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for the help, will do! Also on the other paragraphs, I can't do it alone, would be nice if you helped! Yodas henchman (talk) 17:42, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

I am currently checking every article on List of Nickelodeon Animation Studio productions and the list itself due to poor writing and IP vandalism. I also have several other things I need to look into (70 some pages linking to film and a couple hundred pages with reference issues. If I don't get distracted with other things to do, I got a to do list around 1K pages to get to right now. I don't have the time to add this to my to do list (plus its not a topic of interest for me) Pure Evil (talk) 20:22, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

Intro rewrite

The 1st Provisinal Marine Brigade was a brigade in the United States Marine Corps. It wa started in 1912. The brigade was disbanded in 1951. It was not made to be a permanent unit of the USMC.

The brigade existed for 40 years. It was founded to fight in the Negro Rebellion in Cuba. After this, the soldiers of the brigade fought in World War II in Iceland and Guam. They took part in amphibious attacks in Guam. After the war ended, the brigade fought in the Korean War.

The brigade was quickly reformed and reactivated in 1950 for the Korean War. (??? REformed?) During the war, it helped troops in the Battle of Pusan Perimeter. The soldiers also helped in other battles during this time. The brigade was disbanded on September 13, 1951.

There are likely a bunch of typos in there, but thats the jist of the changes I suggest.Pure Evil (talk) 04:03, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

It wasn't reformed since it was disbanded, the unit got disbanded after it's battles. I don't see anything wrong with the original one. Yodas henchman (talk) 16:14, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

You say is was disbanded in 1951 but reformed in 1950. It was reformed before it was disbanded. The section on disbanding also says they were release after the Sept 5, 1950 Battle of Yongsan. A year before the Sept 13, 1951 date listed. Add in that 40 years of action from 1912 would be 1962...1951 is only 29 years and it would be one less if it was actually at the end of the Battle of Yongsan. The lack of references in this section makes it all questionable at best. Pure Evil (talk) 17:22, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

By reformed I mean reactivated, and I don't put references in the intro section, it's just a summary of the article, the references are in other sections. Yodas henchman (talk) 18:00, 9 August 2023 (UTC)