Talk:Bullfrog
Latest comment: 12 years ago by DJDunsie in topic More comments
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GA review
change- lead
- Two consecutive sentences start with "These" (first paragraph).
Done by User:Auntof6. Best, Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- They did this on purpose - Needs to be backed up by a reference.
- It is sourced to FN#47. Best, Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- Sorry, that one was supposed to be removed when reading further... -Barras talk 08:01, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- It is sourced to FN#47. Best, Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- Bullfrogs live in large, bodies of water - That comma looks misplaced to me (correct me if I'm wrong).
- Done by User:Auntof6. Best, Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- intraerythrocytic - that word needs to be linked or explained.
- Adults
- Male bullfrogs are much bigger... - Define much (or remove it).
- Bullfrogs was - were?
- helminths, trematodes, nematodes, protozoans, mesozoans and leches, those are surely worth linking?
- Habitat and distribution
- There were introduced to...' - They were...?
- Feeding
- Stomach content studies going back to 1913 suggest that the bullfrog preys on any animal it can overpower and stuff down its throat. - That sentence isn't simple at all. Stomach could use a link, preys is not simple, throat could be linked. Maybe change the sentence structure.
- Bullfrogs has?
- invertebrates should be linked.
- While two other studies one in 1977... - is there a comma missing after studies?
- Reproduction
- Why is sexually active linked to a page referring to human?
- ...to males who has territories... - have?
- In captivity, they can become frogs in little as twelve weeks - That sentence sounds weird to me, is there an error in it?
- Development of tadpoles
- gills should be linked.
- Conservation status
- They also been introduced by pet owners - is there a word missing?
- Because of their diet, they have known to have decrease populations of other frogs. - That sentence sounds weird to me.
- What do you suggest as a replacement? Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- In a laboratory experiment by Alford in 1989, found that bullfrogs decreased the population of Cope's gray treefrog. - Sounds weird too.
- As with this one. Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- Because of their diet, they have known to have... - I think that there's at least one word missing or some other error in it.
- In a laboratory experiment by Alford in 1989, found that bullfrogs... - I think that this one also has a grammar error. -Barras talk 08:01, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- All
Fixed Best, Jonatalk to me 16:05, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- All
- As with this one. Jonatalk to me 01:38, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
- Human use
- grammar school - isn't that the British English word? That doesn't fit when speaking about American's system.
I'd suggest to get some very good copy-editor to check the spelling/grammar in that article. As you see above, I probably found several problems in that area and I fear that I didn't found everything. -Barras talk 23:47, 3 August 2012 (UTC)
- I have now Fixed all concerns. I hope now I have satisfied your comments. Best, Jonatalk to me 16:05, 4 August 2012 (UTC)
More comments
change- In the summary, you say bullfrogs can live up to four years. In the adult section, you say four to five. Confliction. DJDunsie (talk) 09:35, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
- In the Taxonomy section, you say "They do this when they feel threaten". Threatened. DJDunsie (talk) 09:39, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
- Human use section. "Usually, this is done in middle school." Schools are called different things in different countries so be specific. I presume this is just the US? "Usually, this is done in middle school in the US." DJDunsie (talk) 09:54, 6 August 2012 (UTC)