Talk:Obesity
Latest comment: 8 months ago by Macdonald-ross in topic Grammar
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changeIs this page a joke? It seems to be a sort of parody the way it's written.--Colonel Battaleaxe (talk) 04:18, 1 January 2011 (UTC)
- It looks like the Obesity In Children section was added on October 24, 2009 by a one time editor from an IP address. It may have been a well meaning edit, but the section is not neutral by any means, suggests actions to take, and has no citations. I removed that section. --The Three Headed Knight (talk) 07:42, 1 January 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you. It does seem more neutral now.--Colonel Battaleaxe (talk) 15:06, 1 January 2011 (UTC)
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change"People with grade 2 and 3 obesity are 29% more likely to die". Example of bad writing: we are all going to die, but fat people are more likely to die early. It's not a question of neutrality, it's a question of grammar. Macdonald-ross (talk) 16:06, 1 March 2024 (UTC)