Talk:Tropical Storm Barry (2007)

Latest comment: 15 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic Comments for VGA

Readability

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Based on a quick reading and a look at these figures [1], there is still a long way to go to make it simple enough. We should try for a Flesch readability figure of around 70. --Peterdownunder (talk) 02:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)Reply

  Done, simplified. Juliancolton (talk) 04:39, 20 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
It's looking better, well done. There was a couple of words, "extratropical" that need explaining for me, and "sinkhole" might need something. Makes me glad I've never lived through one of these storms. Peterdownunder (talk) 05:11, 20 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
I clarified those two words. Thanks for the suggestions. :) Juliancolton (talk) 05:15, 20 January 2009 (UTC)Reply

Some comments for GA

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Here are some things that struck me before I could support promotion to GA.

  1. Not sure how simple "quickly forming" is. quickly is fine, but forming?
  2. A number of recent articles link units such as mph, km/h etc...
  3. Don´t overlink Florida in the lead.
  4. 2 people, 1 surfer - two, one... numbers below 10 in text please.
  5. Is wildfire simple? Possibly link it.
  6. Link cyclone in the history section.
  7. Tropical depression definitely isn´t simple.
  8. Explain UTC.
  9. Is guardrail simple?
  10. "Enhanced Fujita scale" definitely isn´t simple and needs explanation.
  11. I would also not use Coord. as an abbreviation - remember this is Simple English Wikipedia.
  12. ficus tree could use a link.
  13. "The storm created several tornadoes..." there are only two listed. Should this say two tornadoes or should the list say that it is incomplete?

Sorry for not being around more to help with this, hope these help improve the article to GA. The Rambling Man on tour (talk) 16:36, 5 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

All done. Thanks for the comments, –Juliancolton (talk) 18:55, 5 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

Comments for VGA

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  • "formed" is that Simple?
  • "lost in a larger weather system." could use some work too...
  • "low pressure" could be explained or simplified?
  • "extratropical system entered New England.[12] "Extratropical" means that the storm was no longer a tropical cyclone." - heh, here you're doing what is needed, but could you explain extratropical perhaps in parentheses after using it rather than a new sentence?
  • In "Preparations" there are a number of locations which aren't linked, i.e. have no articles. I would expect some of the more major locations to have at least a few sentence stub?
  • Same, for instance, with "Brevard and Volusia counties"...
  • You could remove the Rain overall heading in the table (you already say "rainfall" in the heading for the section), then make the table sortable?

Otherwise, there's nothing standing in this article's way other than apathy on behalf of our voting community! Good stuff. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:31, 9 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

  Doing...Juliancolton | Talk 23:22, 9 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

Last bits

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  • "a top strength of 60 mph" - is strength measured in speed? or could you just say "top speed"?
  • SSHS is abbreviated in the infobox - there's no explanation on what it means expanded. I know the infobox is imported from en.wiki so that's how it is, but it's a little confusing as to its relevance.
  • "1-minute sustained" (sorry i missed this before) probably needs an explanatory note - not sure it's Simple.
  • "...an area of low pressure (a storm)..." any need for "area of low pressure" here on Simple?
  • "Late on June 4, the extratropical system entered New England[12] ("extratropical" means that the storm was no longer a tropical cyclone). " still not happy with (a) the fact we're not using wikilinks to explain complex terms and (b) we've got a reference in the 'wrong' place.
  • Is "surge" Simple?

The Rambling Man (talk) 21:09, 16 May 2009 (UTC)Reply

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