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Racepacket (talk) 19:42, 21 August 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for the suggestions. I did add other materials to Theoretical chemistry, but I do not understand what problems people are having with the way I write. One editor said, "Keep on changing it until the readability score goes down." (But the readability score is based on word length.) One editor said get rid of the red links, but the links are needed to justify leaving the "word list". The difference between an encyclopedia article and a text book is that the article summarizes the topic while the text book explains the topic in depth. If I wrote from scratch, I would produce the text book. The En article represents the consensus of many experts on what is most important. Racepacket (talk) 09:31, 22 August 2011 (UTC)

How about looking at some of the others? Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 16:45, 23 August 2011 (UTC)

Give me a list of the ones you want me to have a look at, thanks, DJDunsie ^{(talk · changes)} 16:53, 23 August 2011 (UTC).

Please try these:

• User:Racepacket/Thermochemistry  Done
• User:Racepacket/DWS
• User:Racepacket/Art Institute of Chicago
• User:Racepacket/GCMS
• User:Racepacket/Theoretical chemistry  Done a bit, this one is tricky
• User:Racepacket/KenOlsen
• User:Racepacket/Carbon–hydrogen bond activation
• User:Racepacket/Bisphenol A
• User:Racepacket/Allen Telescope Array
• Please don't add any more, I have this list to get through. Thank you, DJDunsie ^{(talk · changes)} 14:33, 30 August 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for your help! Racepacket (talk) 17:29, 23 August 2011 (UTC)

I believe in one main idea per paragraph. En Wikipedia has very strict rules against one or two sentence paragraphs and would rather throw unrelated ideas together in a paragraph than have a short paragraph. What is the rule for Simple Wikipedia? You seem to want one or two sentence paragraphs. Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 22:22, 25 August 2011 (UTC)

Good point. I don't know what the real answer is - you will have to ask someone else. Also, look at Solar System, Jupiter's first paragraph, Egypt, United Nations, Turtle etc. I could go on. They have short paragraphs. The reason I did it is because I thought it spreads it out and makes it easier for younger readers to understand and because my grammar book states:

Make only one point in each paragraph. All of the sentences in a paragraph are related to each other.

DJDunsie ^{(talk · changes)} 08:07, 26 August 2011 (UTC)

I agree and understand. More feedback and assistance would be appreciated. Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 23:43, 26 August 2011 (UTC)

• Article was moved. Please pick another article if you have some time. Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 06:49, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

More feedback would help. At each step, I convince myself that I know what is required, but I have been wrong several times. Racepacket (talk) 10:58, 2 September 2011 (UTC)

Funeral for a Friend

Thanks for adding the other web sites to this article. Most of them, though, aren't reliable sources. It would help if you could put in some actual references rather than just a list of other websites. Some of the sites you added seem to have copied the text from the FFAF article on enwiki; those can't be used as references. Thanks. --Auntof6 (talk) 22:10, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

Allen Telescope Array

Thank you for your message. I did attempt to simplify User:Racepacket/Allen Telescope Array. I broke up the sentences to reduce dependent clauses, linked to words that were not on the word list. I run into problems when the first sentence of the first paragraph must be "X is a Y", where Y describes the key or unique aspects of X. I thought ATA might be a good example to work on because it is something that you would understand and is very concrete as opposed to being theoretical. Thank you for the other reference links and for all of your help. Racepacket (talk) 04:38, 31 August 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your helpful changes to Theoretical chemistry. Racepacket (talk) 07:47, 31 August 2011 (UTC)

Actually, I had read each of the articles you listed weeks ago. The list of common translations in Help:Translate English into Simple English is helpful. However, you should also have a bunch of other rules:

• See Also -> Other pages
• External links ->Other webpages
• Remove all portals
• Special rules for technical terms (I still do not understand this part)
• Special rules for the first sentence (I still do not understand this part)
• Special rules for paragraph length (I still do not fully understand, but you have been helping me.)

You, Barras, and I are all intelligent and friendly people. But this is like the nine blind men who felt an elephant. One gets a different idea of what an elephant is like depending on where you experience it -- a rope, a tree stump or a snake.... I look to other Simple articles as a "Model" but they are so different. Sometimes (depending on the subject) I bat 1.000 but other times I am batting 0 in making an article Simple. Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 08:08, 31 August 2011 (UTC)

Good questions, and I understand what you are trying to say. I hope these links help:

For information on technical terms, see Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Scientific_style

For information on the first sentence rules, see Wikipedia:MOS#First_sentence

For information on paragraph length, see Wikipedia:Guide_to_layout#Structure_of_the_article

DJDunsie (talk) 20:11, 22 October 2011 (UTC)

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Thank you for your help on Yabasic. It was an IP editor trying to port an article from En wikipedia and he was running into many problems.

I hope you are well. My mentor, Barras is taking time away from Wikipedia, but I am still trying to crank out some science articles. If you have a few minutes, perhaps you could review one or two. For example, I think that you would enjoy User:Racepacket/Giant Magellan Telescope. Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 21:07, 9 September 2011 (UTC)