Wikipedia:Proposed very good articles/Archive 3

Archived requests

RAID

RAID (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

Hello there, I did a little work on this one, to make it easy to understand; I think there are a few red-links left (less than 5), and I don't know if 10 footnotes are enough for 20k text. Anyway, I think it can be made into a VGA. --Eptalon (talk) 19:48, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Not quite VGA yet...

I feel the lead could do with a fair bit more expansion.
It needs simplification, I think. I don't consider myself a complete noob with computers, so I'd expect to (mostly) understand a Simple English article on computing. Stuff like "A RAID array fixes two or more hard disks into a logical disk." is somewhat foreign to me; imagine how someone not familiar with computing would react to it. Give it another pass over and see what else you can fix. —Giggy 03:54, 21 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have added quite a bit on physical and logical disks, and done some simplifying in the What RAID can and cannot do section--Eptalon (talk) 15:01, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The headings need simplification. For example "Putting disks together, the easy way: JBOD, concatenation or spanning" sounds complicated. Beefball ^Talk 19:53, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I read it all, I liked it, but I did find it pretty hard going... I think it isn't too far from VGA.Yotcmdr ^Talk

Jupiter

Jupiter (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

I thought of putting this up for GA first but having looked at it quite a few times I really think it might make VGA first time. I appreaciate most of the writing has been done by me but I think that shouldn't count against it if it's good enough. As far as I can tell it's pretty comprehensive, definetly long enough and has no red links. It's as good as Saturn, an existing VGA. Cheers. The Flying Spaghetti Monster! 23:03, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

I'm not sure if this is where to comment, but I think that this article is not yet ready to be a VGA. Although the earlier VGAs were of this standard, the standard has risen. Comparing the length of the article to the EN Article, many details have been left out. This means that the article is not comprehensive enough. Not only is the article lacking details, many sections have been left out. I think you might need to expand the article a bit more first, although you don't have to provide a complete translation of the EN article in Simple English. I have spotted no errors so far, except the wrong category. It should not be put under Solar System, only Planets. I will help change it. Hope this helps. Sorry! Minor or Prime 09:09, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I don't understand why the article title isn't at Jupiter. —Giggy 03:55, 21 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It is now. I just moved it a day ago. The Flying Spaghetti Monster! 11:45, 21 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It seems to meet most of the criteria. I agree with MC, it could use more information and details from enWP.--≈ Lights χ 17:35, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Please go through the article and make sure the references don't have a space before them. Thanks, Majorly ^talk 17:39, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done I'm going to put it up for voting tommorow I think. I just hope it generates enough interest.. F S M 17:40, 26 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Powderfinger

Powderfinger (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

Been working on this one a while (see the page history and the talk page) and I think it's pretty close to VGA standard now. What do you guys think? —Giggy 09:39, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Some ideas:

Band members probably deserve their own articles.
Similarly the albums.
Livid is a red link and for VGA that should be resolved.
- Oops, I was sureI got all of them... created it: Livid. —Giggy 10:47, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Section 1.3 should just be "Break from recording".
- Done. —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"aggressive" may be a touch complex. Link it?
- Done (EnWT, will try and add something in Simple English at some point...). —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I'd expand ARIA before using it.
- Done. —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Be careful not to overlink - you relink ARIA in the "Successful releases" section but missed the one before in the Early work section.
- Fixed. —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Because of the lyrics on one song, "Black Tears", the album was nearly banned." swearing/sex/politics?
- Politics, added. —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Reconciliation Australia" should have an article.
Make discog tables same column widths.
- I have no idea how to do this or if it'll look better once done. Can you show me how it's done? —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - I have done what I thought would look better - check it out! You also need a key for what the em-dash represents. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:53, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Thanks! done. —Giggy 13:42, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"1994-2000 " in the table needs the en-dash.
- Done. —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
There's an obssession here with adding other websites so anything else you can add would probably be a good idea, like a link to Billboard's page for them, or discogs, or allmusic or similar.
- Added some. —Giggy 11:40, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 10:14, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hypothetical senario: "what does "Live album" or "Best of" stand for? There isn't a link to them, it should be written into the article somewhere!" --Gwib^-(talk)- 23:09, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. —Giggy 09:12, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Jessica Alba (the sequel)

Jessica Alba (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

Well, I'm not giving up on the PVGA process. I'm relisting this to get my two weeks worth of good, constructive, positive comments from the community to ensure that when I go to voting, I don't get any major surprises. I've taken on-board the criticisms from the first time I nominated this, and the only thing I couldn't see how to "fix" was expanding the article - Alba is only 27 years old and this article covers her career, childhood and personal life thoroughly. Thanks in advance for your help. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:26, 25 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Born again Christianity is pretty confusing; I couldn't work out what "When she was a teenager she became a born-again Christian" is really saying (unless it's saying that she developed a personal belief in Jesus... which makes it different from just plain Christianity how?).
- Well, it's a little complex but that's why the link is there. It's a common phrase and I can't really think of another of putting it. Unless you can? The Rambling Man (talk) 09:48, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Meh, I guess it's OK - the target article needs work. —Giggy 01:54, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Check throughout for this sort of thing.
- I've checked but sometimes it's a case of not seeing the wood for the trees... if anyone else spots articles which are overlinked then feel free to unlink where appropriate! The Rambling Man (talk) 09:48, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"But I have too much anxiety" - axiety isn't a simple word - relevant wlink?
- linked. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:48, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Is https://www.imdb.com/news/wenn/2001-10-16#celeb3 reliable?
- It's as reliable as the rest of imdb I guess - would you prefer me to replace it? The Rambling Man (talk) 09:48, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Put it this way: I have no idea who Wenn is, and I really don't want that discussion to take place again. ;-) If you could find an alternate source it'd be great. —Giggy 01:54, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done - found a much more reliable source. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:09, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- What about http://www.looktothestars.org/celebrity/95-jessica-alba ?
  - I'd say yes, it's from the organisation's website. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:48, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Is it? My impression it's some sort of catalogue/database of celebrities who do charity work. That said, its about us page seems to assert reliability.
      - Done Well, I've replaced it with press release pages from two of the actual charities so hopefully that'll do the trick! The Rambling Man (talk) 12:26, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"He asked her to marry him on her twentieth birthday.[8] They eventually broke up after a four-year relationship." - might want to say that she said no (did she?), and you've already said (2 sentences ago) that it was a 4 year relationship. Perhaps remove that and merge those sentences?
- Done. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:48, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This is from the Personal life section only. —Giggy 07:06, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'm onto 'em Giggmeister. Cheers. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:40, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: - a few films that she starred in were missing, but I've added them in. --Gwib^-(talk)- 09:28, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, but next time you copy and paste an entire section from en-wiki, can you recheck the formatting and links which previously worked. And also you included a film which doesn't exist yet so she can't have starred in it. Cheers. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:40, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Formatting was fine on my computer. She's starrING in the film. Word Nerd :). --Gwib^-(talk)- 09:50, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well that's not the point is it? I had reformatted the table on this wiki. Please be more careful. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:52, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"believed that she was being judged by the way she looked" - you could go into greater depth (eg. she was being judged by the way she looked. People/priests thought she showed too much skin etc etc). Basically WHY she was being judged.
- That would be original research. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:55, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"She also had from obsessive compulsive disorder and panic attacks." - missing words, try re-writing the sentence or adding something in.
- Fixed. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:55, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Alba's father was in the Air Force which caused them to live in many different places - maybe explain why ("..in many different places because of..."
- Revised. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:55, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Multiple links for movies (Sin City, Good Luck Chuck) should be removed. --Gwib^-(talk)- 16:45, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Some delinked. If you see more (which are close together) then delink away. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:55, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Can you elaborate on the charity work? Also I would replace IMDb as a source. It's community edited, so I wouldn't class it as reliable. Hippopotamus (talk) 22:51, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I agree with this. —Giggy 02:12, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Charity work elaborated. IMDb to be removed soon. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:26, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"Both GQ and InStyle had her on their June covers,[23][24]." - what happened here? Comma, then full stop?
- Done Fixed by User:Tholly. Thanks! The Rambling Man (talk) 12:28, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Sorry, I was going to say here but I realised I had to go out and have just got back. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:05, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"She also had suffered from obsessive compulsive disorder and panic attacks." - simplify to "she also had obsessive..."?
- Done Minor reword, had OCD and suffered from panic attacks. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:29, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's what I got from the rest of the article; pretty well written overall. —Giggy 02:12, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

To Hippo: Re:IMDb, while I think you're generally right, the infobox actually has a link to her profile (and this is taken from en-wiki I presume) so should that be removed wholesale? Either you trust IMDb or you don't? I'll work on the other uses but I'm interested to know if some of IMDb, in your opinion, is more reliable than other parts...? The Rambling Man (talk) 12:31, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

IMDb have a page "How/where you get your information? How accurate/reliable is it? " which explains where they get their information. The problem is that they don't indicate which information is user-submitted and which comes from more traditional sources that could be seen as reliable. I tend to trust the more technical listings for movies as they just seem to be ripped from the closing credits. I'm least trusting of biographies simply because I've seen so many contradictions in them in the past. I don't have a problem with an IMDb link in the infobox as a courtesy, but I wouldn't use it to back up the content of the article. Hippopotamus (talk) 00:45, 28 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, well as far as I can tell now, I only use the site for her appearances and awards. Is that okay or would you prefer me to find other sources for all of those too? The Rambling Man (talk) 05:57, 28 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

You should be able to track down the awards in other sources relatively easily in newspapers, magazines, or industry publications, so I would at least try to replace IMDb for those. If you can find the appearances elsewhere relatively easily, it would be great, but I'm less concerned. It's a judgement call, really. Hippopotamus (talk) 01:16, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think I've ever edited an EnWP film article, so I'm not sure, but I believe the IMDB link in the infobox is per en:WP:EL (links that add useful content that wouldn't appear in an FA). So I think it should stay in the infobox, and you should just be extra careful with what information you use it to cite and who wrote that. (Eg. for appearance you can probably use it as you're just citing a photo.) —Giggy 09:52, 28 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Humph! I just took a look at this article, and, not having read this discussion, fixed the broken IMDb link! However, I agree that IMDb is not the most reliable source in the world. However, there were a number of references to it, and I think it should stay temporarily, with the proviso that a better cittation is forthcoming.

Otherwise, this article seems to fulfil the criteria. Amandajm (talk) 14:46, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I think that the link was broken because TRM tried to take out the IMDb refs but accidentally left one in. You also have removed a large chunk about the Playboy magazine cover though. Why? - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:54, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

No matter, I've replaced all the missing text and removed IMDB links. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:56, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Good, I would have done but I was bound to mess things up further. Thanks. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 15:37, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not too sure about a couple of the "other websites": askmen.com and jessica-alba.eu. The first doesn't offer much information beyond gossip and user-submitted "sexiness" ratings and the other is one of many fan sites. Is there an official site? If not I'd just have IMDb and TV.com. Hippopotamus (talk) 17:32, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I go check. Thanks for your continued and constructive interest. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:40, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
There has been some talk on Simple talk about requiring VGAs to have a cite for birth dates. It isn't a policy or even a guideline yet, but I went ahead and added a cite about her birth date and place anyway. Staeiou (talk) 17:01, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Jessica Alba

Jessica Alba (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

A slightly different type of article this time, a comprehensive biography of one of Hollywood's favourite actresses. I've gone through the article, linked and simplified where possible and checked the whole thing off against the criteria (which, as usual, I've added on the talk page) - I believe the article meets all of them already, it just needs some fresh eyes to ensure it's not too complex. Thanks very much for your time. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:57, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 38 is broken; I think it's the 2008 link. —Giggy 11:47, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Good spot, fixed now Giggy, cheers! The Rambling Man (talk) 11:49, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Anna Kournikova

Anna Kournikova (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

I've expanded this stub significantly and it now meets all CA criteria. I am aware this is third of its type but that should not affect the voting - if it meets the criteria then there shouldn't be a problem. I won't be opening the voting on this article yet though because I'd like some feedback on the structure and content of the article. For ease of reference, the current criteria for VGA are listed on the talk page of the article and I'm more than happy to receive comments etc there, here or on my talk page. Thanks for spending some time reading this and, hopefully, pushing for another Very Good Article on Simple English Wikipedia. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:08, 6 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

American Airlines Flight 11

American Airlines Flight 11 (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

So, at last, not an Eastern European tennis player... I've worked hard to expand this from a tiny stub to something worthy of the subject. It's an extremely sensitive topic which I've hopefully dealt with with consideration and accuracy. I believe it already meets all of the current VGA criteria, I've left an overview of my opinion on the talk page. I also think it would be a highly appropriate subject to have as our main page in September. I respectfully submit the article to the community. Thank you for your time. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:59, 7 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Daniela Hantuchová

Daniela Hantuchová (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

Again, another project I've done on my own but hopefully that won't mean it isn't any good! Yet again you now have an article which is more comprehensively referenced than English Wikipedia. She's a highly notable tennis player who has been as high as number five in the world in recent times. I've checked the article against the requirements for VGA (as can be found on the talk page. I'd be delighted to receive comments and criticism and, even more so, support in making this one of Simple English Wikipedia's Very Good Articles. Thanks for your time. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:34, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Mass Rapid Transit (Singapore)

Mass Rapid Transit (Singapore) (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

I am giving the featured article since "Template:FA" was missing. Timothy Mok (talk) 12:15, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support. As per nomination. Timothy Mok (talk) 12:18, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have written a message to you regarding Good and Very good articles.

The article must be about a subject which belongs in Wikipedia. There is no use improving articles that do not belong here, and better fit another wiki, like Wikibooks, Wikispecies, Wiktionary, etc. Done
The article must be comprehensive. A comprehensive article is not missing any major facts and details. (This is not a GA criteria, it is only for VGA)
The article must have a certain length. A minimum is 5 kilobytes, not including infoboxes, images, references, other websites, interwiki, and categories. There is no use in denoting very short articles as very good. (GA require 3.5kb; your article is currently 2.9kb all included; this means it is much too short)
The article must have gone through a few revisions, possibly by different editors. No one writes perfect articles. Done
The article must be placed in the appropriate category. It must have at least one interwiki link. Done
The last few revisions should be minor changes (like spell-checking or link-fixing).
All important terms should be linked and there must be no red links left. Red links point to articles that do not exist yet. Usually the important word or phrase is only linked the first time it occurs. (This is a criterion for VGA only; it is not in GA)
If there are any illustrations, they must be pertinent to the article. They must also be properly labelled.
There must be no templates pointing to the fact that the article needs improvement. These templates include {{complex}}, {{cleanup}}, {{stub}}, {{unreferenced}} and {{wikify}}. The article also should not need them.
Content that is from books, journal articles or other publications needs to be referenced. This can either be done with <ref>..</ref><references/> tags, or as a list of publications. For articles that have references or external links on the English Wikipedia, there must be at least one in the Simple English article as well.--Eptalon (talk) 13:03, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

There are a ton of red links, actual prose is fairly sparse – no information on how much it cost to build, controversy around it (surely any big project encounters some kind of opposition), any problems with it, why it was expanded (nobody just throws money at it), etc. Cass andra 17:07, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Turn the red links blue, add a bunch of references, expand on the history and you might be close to GA. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:28, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It really needs much, much more prose with references. I think you need maybe a paragraph on history, one or two on infrastructure and trains, and maybe one on ticketing and one or two on safety and security. Keep the table with the network, but expand the lists into sentences with extra information. Hippopotamus (talk) 22:44, 26 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, try adding references and a "history" section and then go for a GA. The redlinks need to be made blue too. You can do this by creating [stub] articles for where they link too; that is better than just taking them out but requires more time/effort. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 09:47, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This is most definitely a No. Timothy Mok, who has proposed this, is a very new contributor and perhaps not very aware of the standards required. Even under those circumstances, I am surprised at its nomination.

This isn't just a matter of the article needing more material. The article is written in very poor English. This is probably partly due to the writer not being a native speaker of English, but it is also due to simple carelessness. No article of this length should be so badly editted that it has the word "the" where it should say "to" in the very first paragraph.

The writer then describes in a simplistic way (using inaccurate English) that people get onto the train with other people, go to their destination and get off. (!) That is the sort of info required (perhaps) in an article that tells what a railway train is, at the most basic level. If this is an article about a particular network, then we don't need to know that people get on and off the train. We need particular information about that network. Amandajm (talk) 14:02, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This can't do yet. We should add some info about the under construction Circle Line (yay!), the North-East line and the other proposed future lines, for example, the Downtown Line, Thomson Line etc. Chenzw Talk 14:07, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Now looking at the article more thoroughly, I think this proposal should be postponed for about 1 week while we work on it. There is just too much content not covered yet. Chenzw Talk 14:24, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Postpone for a week and then go for a GA instead? - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:45, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Unlist here; improve so it can be made Ga, and re-list there when its near ready (i.e meads 5 of the 9 criteria). --Eptalon (talk) 14:46, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Go for it. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:51, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - This is ridiculous! How can anyone proclaim the MRT Singapore article to be a VGA!? It is not very long, and look at the amount of red links! I oppose this strongly. Minor Contributer (talk) 14:09, 30 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        Have you actually read the discussion above? - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:11, 30 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        What makes you think I haven't? Of course I have! Minor Contributer (talk) 14:12, 30 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        Sorry, it's just that it looks like we've decided to unlist this here (just waiting for someone to do it) and then you repeat some of the above comments and say you'll oppose, which is irrelevant as everyone's agreed about it already. Oh well. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:17, 30 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        There wasn't any indication that you were really going to postpone it. Anyway, this is far from being even a GA. Minor Contributer (talk) 10:17, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        * Postpone for a week and then go for a GA instead? - tholly 14:45, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
        
        * Unlist here; improve so it can be made Ga, and re-list there when its near ready (i.e meads 5 of the 9 criteria). --Eptalon (talk) 14:46, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
        
        Comments just above yours. Never mind. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 16:09, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I propose we archive this section now to avoid confusion, as it appears there is general agreement that this isn't going make the criteria in time. Hippopotamus (talk) 17:22, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sounds like a good idea. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 17:25, 31 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. —Giggy 10:11, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Archived voting

Powderfinger

Powderfinger (change · talk · history · links · watch · logs · delete)

Nominated 17 August, vote ends 24 August.

Result: Unanimous pass. Vote ended 23 August due to WP:SNOW. 6 support 0 oppose F S M 22:21, 23 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

No more comments up there, so I'm putting it up for a vote in the hope of getting another VGA on a musician/band. Cheers! —Giggy 05:58, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support

Support - I've reviewed and commented on the article a couple of times but this is definitely decent enough for VGA now. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:54, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks a lot for your help with this article :-) —Giggy 13:03, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support So far as I can tell, meets the criteria. Swatjester (talk) 08:22, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Same as SwatJester. The Flying Spaghetti Monster! 18:03, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Looks just fine to me. Well referenced, all simple, meets pretty much all of VGA criteria, so I'll be happy to support. :-) Regards, RyanCross (talk) 04:03, 21 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Weak support, it's probably not phenomenal, but I'll support. Could you do a little reference-cleanup? Good enough. — AE (talk) 01:35, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Is there anything in particular that needs work? I've tried to ensure all the references are formatted correctly and that everything is cited. —Giggy 01:44, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Several of them don't have access dates. But it's not huge, just seems off. — AE (talk)
Thanks for replying. All the online references have access dates; the rest are magazine articles. Since the purpose of the access date is to ensure that the item being cited existed at some point (because websites can go down at any time), it is inappropriate to put an access date to something on print (since magazines can't disappear off the face of the Earth like websites!). I just checked again and I believe all the Internet sources have access dates. Thanks. —Giggy 02:59, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - No serious problems. Chenzw Talk 12:47, 23 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

~~Weak Oppose~~ - Unfortunately, the article is missing the Philanthropy section. This is quite an important part. If it is added, then I will gladly support. Chenzw Talk 12:21, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't consider this a necessary aspect as per the criteria. However, as you do, I'll go ahead and add something relating to that to the article, hopefully it's written simply enough. —Giggy 13:04, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment

Using the English wiktionary (instead of Simple) to clear a redlink and define a term should not be done if your goal is to be using SE (which it has to be for articles here). This would be the same as just linking to the English wikipedia for an article to clear a red-link. Looking over the opening, there are a couple words/links of questionable Simple-icity. "unsucessful" - Did not sell very well, was not popular.. Breakthrough - wikt:en: is bad.
"Odyssey Number Five was Powderfinger's shortest album yet, and, like Internationalist, talked about political and social issues." (for example)
- "Odyssey Number Five was Powderfinger's shortest album yet. Similar to Internationalist, it talked about political and social issues."
- "Like" is a tricky word. It should used as the emotion but not as "similar to" or "for example".
- "... sentence ..." , and "... sentence (with the same subject implied) ..." should be two senctences, not one. "And" can be evil / anti-Simple when used with sentence fragments.

-- Creol(talk) 08:08, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much for your comments, Creol! I've fixed up all the wikt:en: stuff, either by creating new pages at SimpleWikt, or by rewording here. I've also fixed the sentence you suggested here and will have another look at the article to see if I can find any more of those issues. I'm still getting the hang of writing simply so your suggestions really help. :-) Cheers. —Giggy 10:59, 22 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Just made and linked all the band members today. Thought I would help out. F S M 22:05, 23 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Xena: Warrior Princess

Vote Started: August 2, 2008, Vote ends: August 9, 2008

Note; added by Lawless Fan (please sign your posts!). —Giggy 03:38, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support

Oppose

There are numerous instances of complex language, such as "composed" "developed" "confidental" "leases" (needs to be explained) "predate" "pampered" "inverosimilitud" (I don't even know what that is) "inconsistencies" "pretensions" "consolidated" "preference" "transformation" "precipitous" "argumentative" Cass andra 23:58, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose - complex (I think inverosimilitud means impossible in that context, but the word itself doesn't exist), basically a long list rather than an article and some references don't work. Needs wikifying badly, and was it even in the 'Proposed' section? --Gwib^-(talk)- 00:06, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

I will not vote on this one yet, I will just give an example:

The show freely borrows names and themes from various mythologies around the world, primarily the Greek, anachronistically adapting them to suit the demands of the storyline. Historical figures and events from a number of different historical eras and myths make numerous appearances, and the main characters are often credited with resolving important historical situations. These include an encounter with Homer, before he was famous, in which Gabrielle encourages his storytelling aspirations[39]; the fall of Troy[40]; and the capture of Caesar by pirates, with Xena cast as the pirate leader[41]. This quirky mix of timelines and the amalgamation of historical and mythological elements fueled the rise of the show to cult status during the 1990s and early 2000s. It was one of the first shows to tap into its internet following, allowing for fans from all over the world to discuss and suggest things related to the show. The fandom continues to this day.

I think this article still needs a lot of work, making sections such as this ones simpler (anacronistically and amalgamation are hardly simple), also whether something is cult or not should usually be pointed at with an external reference. (I added the reflist template), there seems to be a porblem with some references; in general, I would propose to first go for good article; and only list the article here if it really meets half (ie. 5) of the criteria. --Eptalon (talk) 10:07, 8 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

The warrior princess riding alone His past the covers of shame Against the forces of evil Fight for the sake, not for fame.

The horns announce their arrival, they sing his name "Let step to the warrior! Anime!" The drums Rug That the villains are caring The Warrior Princes already is here!

This translation was headed with the words "English Letter". Is that supposed to mean "English translation"?
The translation is obviously faulty. eg

"The warrior princess... He..." If it refers to Xena, it must be "She..."

Needs a comma or semi-colon after "alone", needs a full-stop after "shame", an exclamation mark after "name".

"The drums Rug that the villians are caring." What on earth is meant! Does it mean the drum "roll"? What is meant by "the villians are caring". It is not a good translation. It might be better translated "fearing".

"Princes" should be "princess", I suppose.

Definitely has a lot of work to do. I don't understand why articles are proposed before they are anywhere near ready. Amandajm (talk) 10:30, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Jessica Alba (vote 2)

Vote started: August 1, 2008, Vote ends: August 8, 2008

Result: Passed: 9-0

Support

Support - tholly ^--Turnip-- 08:52, 1 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support per above comments. —Giggy 10:57, 1 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Synergy 13:10, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Much better. --American Eagle (talk) 06:11, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - --Gwib^-(talk)- 09:11, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Looks much better to me now; some things need their time --Eptalon (talk) 10:38, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support 99.224.35.207 (talk) 14:35, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Very kind but I think you need to be a "named user" to register a valid vote. Thanks though! The Rambling Man (talk) 14:39, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I did not notice, but you have seven supports already, so my vote does not matter anyhow. 99.224.35.207 (talk) 14:55, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Jolly decent of you in any case! The Rambling Man (talk) 14:57, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Well written and well referenced. Majorly ^talk 14:53, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support per Majorly --.snoopy. (talk) 18:45, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Comments

"She has been listed in the "Hot 100" section of Maxim magazine many times" - How many times? Might be clearer if literally put.
- I'll see what I can do about that. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Referenced each appearance explicitly. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:52, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe a few more 'Other Websites'
- I was asked to refine the websites so the ones there combined with the many references should be just fine. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Anything more on her personal life would be good. There is more about her image in the church than her marriage and motherhood.
- Well her marriage and motherhood is relatively new while her affiliation to the church has been lifelong so I think the balance is just right. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

--Gwib^-(talk)- 21:41, 1 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The word suffer ("and suffered from panic attacks") is a red link. --Gwib^-(talk)- 12:33, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Word suffer removed. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:49, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: - shouldn't the article be under "Jessica Warren"? She got married, after all. --Gwib^-(talk)- 09:14, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: - are you kidding?! When women get married, they don't always change their surname and almost invariably don't when they've become famous under another name. Plus, while we may not have WP:COMMONNAME, English Wikipedia certainly does. If you really must, create a redirect at Jessica Warren that points back to Alba. But first, find a source that actually calls her that. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:38, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Redirects are cheap; hence Jessica Warren is up. (Not that it means her name is Jessica Warren, but there's no harm in making if someone considered that title.) —Giggy 09:43, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

They're cheap, sure, but there has to be a good reason for them, which I don't see here. I wonder how many pages of Google you'd have to go through to hit Jessica Warren and get Jessica Alba. Also, there's a potentially notable Warren in existence, so I think the current redirect is more misleading than it is useful. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:49, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: - no need to take it so personally, it was a mere observation. That's why I didn't move the article immediately, instead I commented. If you think it's confusing to have two articles on a Jessica Warren (we don't have two yet, but may), then just create a disambig page. It's exactly what they're for. --Gwib^-(talk)- 10:51, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: - not taking it personally, I just couldn't believe you thought that the article should be called "Jessica Warren" - and the only reason you did think that is because you read the article and discovered she married someone called Warren. I don't really care if the redirect stays or not (personally I think it falls easily under "unlikely redirect" and should be deleted) but I'd say its existence justifies the creation of Angelina Pitt, Kate Mendes etc. Unless her legal name is Jessica Warren, the redirect is simply incorrect. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:59, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

(unindenting) Is the book in footnote 2 (Rivera) the same as the one listed in further reading? - If so, I think it would be enough to cite it once only (with cite book?) --Eptalon (talk) 10:29, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, well Gwib put it there so perhaps you could ask him. I'm happy to remove it from further reading because I assume it is the same. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:31, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Better.. :) --Eptalon (talk) 10:37, 6 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Jessica Alba

Vote started: July 16, 2008, Vote ends: July 23, 2008

Support

Support. I looked at this when you first put it up for VGA, now I can vote! I assume but just wish to check that the only awards you haven't linked (in the TV/Film tables) are redlinks. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 21:23, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support (using the template, Tholly ;-)) - TRM has done some more great work. I've done minor cleanup and gotten rid of all the redlinks. —Giggy 09:26, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - I didn't get to do a complete copyedit of it, but I think it is very good. -- American Eagle (talk) 17:41, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Weak support --Terryblack (talk) 19:23, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Strongly oppose - gramatical errors, ambiguity, poor word choices, MoS issues .. Most of them do not scream out, but the constant barrage of little issues adds up like a thousand paper cuts. I could not see supporting this as a GA, let alone a VGA. Choosing what is likely the least flattering picture of her in Commons for the infobox (and our infoboxes realy should have an other awards section.. I need to look into that.) doesn't help -- Creol(talk) 18:58, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Can you please point out examples of this behavior (i.e. quotes)?68.96.213.118 (talk) 20:01, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

You have already cleared the first I got to, "born in Pomona in California". In the next sentence we have the MoS issue of linking a term its first use (television is used but the first link to it is in television series several lines later. Appearance is also not Simple English and ambiguous (did she appeared or is it about how she appears -looks). Film is ambiguous, movie or motion picture is not but this was changed later. Originally movie was used, but not linked. "She became famous with the television series Dark Angel which was on from 2000 to 2002" - with the television series? and what was the series on. Why was a lawsuit following a cover around? ("appeared on the cover of Playboy, which was followed by a lawsuit") The next sentence should be split in half and the word "them" as a personal pronoun probably should not be used to reference an impersonal (inanimate) thing. "Her mother is called Catherine and has Danish and.." If she is called Catherine, what is her name. (I work with a guy called Remy but he is named Richard.. why use called if that is her name). This sentence is made to look worse when the next one about her father is done cleaner ("Her father, Mark, is Mexican American"). I am not certain the phrase "Air Force family" is easy to understand (and likely should be reworded to explain), but the next sentence definitely needs separated. The word travel also tends to indicate more a vacation/world exploring feel than the "had to move" feel it is meant to give. "She was in hospital for much of the time". In hospitals? "She has also says she had.." Has says?? Neither "Graduated" nor "High school" are SE and neither are linked the first time used. Also the sentence they are in needs to be split. All of this is in the first 4 paragraphs. Other things include her awards for work done as part of her career are partially listed under public image, and her no-nudity rule is under personal (although it entirely deals with her acting and not her personal life). Oh, and did anyone notice the first IW link shown? en:wikt:apology.. and "she got a personal from Playboy owner Hugh Hefner". None of it is deal ending, but so much of this should have been caught (I do have to wonder how three people voted on this and missed all of this.) TRM's work is usually much better than this and I can only assume he was rushed when it came to this one as there are so many little things that slipped through that normally wouldn't have. Edits done by others added some errors while correcting others after the voting had started. This also brings up problems with the article meeting criteria 6. Much of nine edits during the voting period are beyond simple spelling checks and link fixing. -- Creol(talk) 02:29, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose - Otherwise it'll pass, and apparently it needs more work. I'll get a picture. --Gwib^-(talk)- 19:17, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Weak oppose. It's not quite there yet. I know nothing about the subject, but I think it might need a little more content and a good copyedit. I'd probably be inclined to support it as a GA with a little polishing, so maybe spend a few days working on it and resubmit there. Hippopotamus (talk) 21:48, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose per Creol and this bizarre voting system where people just show up at the last moment claiming issues as bad as "a thousand paper cuts". Good luck simple Wikipedia. Forget it. The Rambling Man (talk) 22:06, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose per Creol for now. Cheers, Razor flame 23:40, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose Some of the MoS issues raised have been fixed, but the article still needs a lot more content. Also, as Hippo mentioned, I'd aim for GA first before going for a VGA.--TBC 12:25, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Is there is a reference for "Alba wanted to act since she was five"? I can't find it in the online sources, so is it in the magazine article? Hippopotamus (talk) 16:46, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, it's in the magazine unfortunately. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:49, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It still has some issues with reading fluidity Jessica .. Alba ... . Alba .. Alba... (can you vary a bit, perhaps?) ;) --Eptalon (talk) 20:38, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Can we close this as TRM is currently away (see his talk page). —Giggy 23:18, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Anna Kournikova

Vote started: July 11, 2008, Vote ends: July 18, 2008

Result: Pass (10.5 - 0) -- Creol(talk) 14:30, 20 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support

Support - Very well-written, referenced and comprehensive. It is very good and I support. -- AmericanEagle (talk) 18:37, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support, another great article. You just don't get tired do you! - tholly ^--Turnip-- 20:15, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I do, and I apologise for not being more creative with my choices of VGA, but I just want this project to have something to be proud of on its main page rather than repetitive articles featuring. Thanks for your support! The Rambling Man (talk) 20:20, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Any VGAs are better than none, the subject doen't really matter - keep up the good work! - tholly ^--Turnip-- 20:35, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - another good one. --Gwib^-(talk)- 11:43, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Meets criteria, well written, another great TRM work. And a great subject, too. ;-) —Giggy 11:46, 16 July 2008 (UTC) That's a support; I just think it silly to use the template while in the support section.[reply]
- It may be silly to use the template, but it makes quickly counting the votes easier. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 15:49, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - No complaints. Nice article. :) ← κεηηε∂γ ^{(talk) (wikiproject collaboration)} 18:18, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Very good article even if it another eastern European tennis player. Well done Rambling Man, I support entirely. The Flying Spaghetti Monster! 19:44, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Good to see new VGAs; let's hope it makes the 6 votes. --Eptalon (talk) 19:45, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- You are the seventh. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 20:08, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Let's see, the article is long enough, well referenced, seems simplified, and I think we have, yet, another VGA from The Rambling Man. Good job everyone. Thanks, RyanCross (talk) 20:38, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support --Terryblack (talk) 21:06, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Fits all of the requirements that are required of a VGA. Cheers, Razor flame 20:46, 17 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Hippopotamus (talk) 16:41, 18 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Comments

I just caught a couple of typos in the article. Someone else may want to go through it too, just to double check. Hippopotamus (talk) 16:15, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I saw that, and thanks. Is it VGA quality? The Rambling Man (talk) 16:16, 14 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: - are the Grand Slam Doubles results, the mixed doubles and the WTA titles all incorporated into the article? They seem quite important in her career. --Gwib^-(talk)- 11:34, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Gwib, check out the "Grand Slam record" and "Victories" sections - all wins are covered, including the WTA titles, some of which were actually, in the big scheme of things, pretty minor. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:36, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - If all wins (and loses) are covered, and readability is good, then I have no choice but to {{support}}! --Gwib^-(talk)- 11:43, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Go for it. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:44, 16 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

American Airlines Flight 11

Vote started: July 8, 2008, Vote ended: July 15, 2008

Result: Passed (10 support, 0 oppose)

Support

Support - very good, a few sentences could do with fixing and I'd like to see some more 'Other Websites', but overall good work. --Gwib^-(talk)- 09:43, 9 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support - I agree. The article has a great presentation, I couldn't find any red links and there are more than enough references/sources. It looks great and I think it deserves to be a VGA. --The Flying Spaghetti Monster (talk) 11:19, 9 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Looks good. Maxim_(talk) 17:25, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support per my comments below all being addressed. —Giggy 07:58, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support I've been following this for a while, support ← κεηηε∂γ ^{(talk) (wikiproject collaboration)} 08:06, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support yer, it's very good. ^_^ -- RyanCross (talk) 12:43, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Simple and well-written.--TBC 15:40, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - finally, a non-European tennis player, yay! I only don't really like that the "Other websites" are written as references, they are not references, they are more "further reading" from another website, and I really don't like that, especially when only two of them are that way? Other then that, it is very good. -- America ^†alk 17:26, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks American Eagle - bear in mind that templates are just a good way of providing a consistent look to things. They are other websites, but there's no reason not to use the template this way. Cheers! The Rambling Man (talk) 17:35, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Looks very good to me. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 07:33, 12 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. I'm happy. Hippopotamus (talk) 16:50, 12 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Comments

A few notes on reading through; some stuff could probably be simplified more, etc.

"AA 11 flight path from Boston to New York City" could be simplified... perhaps "The path taken by American Airlines Flight 11..."?
- Done
"There were 81 people, with the five hijackers and 11 crew members, that died in the crash" - mention the deaths earlier in the sentence, else it's a bit confusing midway through. (Read to the first comma, then stop and look away and you'll see what I mean.)
- Done
"466 mile per hour" - plural?
- Hmm, template trouble... The Rambling Man (talk) 12:07, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Not sure about how to fix this - the template code I've used {{convert|466|mph|km/h|0|lk=on|sing=off}} when pasted in en-wiki works fine (i.e. you get miles per hour) but it doesn't work here on Simple en-wiki. Any ideas? The Rambling Man (talk) 12:13, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Copy the template code from the EnWP template to here, click the "show changes" button (next to preview), then play around with it is what I do. —Giggy 04:36, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - Done that already - the code is identical and quite intricate so I don't really want to mess with it since it's used all over the place. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:29, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"The damage to the North Tower made it so that people could not escape from above where the aircraft had crashed" - icky, this could be reworded a bit I think.
- Reworded. 12:27, 10 July 2008 (UTC)
Redlink; elevator shaft.
- DoneWho put that there?! linked back to elevator where the shaft (will be/is) explained. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:27, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"exploding on the 77th floor, the 22nd floor, and at street level, on the West Side Lobby." - it exploded 3 times? Confused me a bit... can you reword a bit?

And that's about it. —Giggy 11:02, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Done Simplified considerably. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:33, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, and you might want to think about using the audio samples here, perhaps. —Giggy 11:06, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah, could do - I link to Commons at least, I don't really want to cram too much media in the article though. Is it a deal breaker? The Rambling Man (talk) 12:33, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Two things, the "Include" in "They identified two other Flight 11 victims, including the lead flight attendant Karen Martin, after body remains were discovered near Ground Zero in 2006." should be simplified, but I'm not sure what it should say. And the last two "Other websites" are websites, and should be retrievable for the {{cite web}} template - it should just be links. Other than that, it looks good. Fix those two and I'll {{support}}. -- America ^†alk 22:24, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Two other... including A -> A and another? --Eptalon (talk) 22:28, 10 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - I don't see a problem with the use of {{Cite web}} for other websites - it provides a consistent look and feel to other website links, and it provides more information than just a plain link. There's no MOS guidance here and it's really no big deal. As for the reword of the "including", I've tried... Thanks for your comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:34, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Movie

Should there be a section on the movie? --Gwib^-(talk)- 12:27, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I can mention it, but if the movie is notable then I guess it should have an article of its own. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:42, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I guess you meant United 93, wrong plane dude. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:04, 11 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Daniela Hantuchová

Vote started: July 1, 2008, Vote ends: July 8, 2008

Result: passed (8 support, 0 Oppose)

Support

Support per my comments below. —Giggy 09:02, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. References seem fine. Just see final comment below. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:44, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you Tholly, your comment has been addressed! The Rambling Man (talk) 16:06, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - All fine then :) - tholly ^--Turnip-- 16:21, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Looks good. One final minor thing is that one of your references is a footnote, but that's not so important. Hippopotamus (talk) 21:30, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support looks good. --Yegoyan (talk) 00:11, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Pretty good-looking, and I believe it meets the requirements. Good job -- America ^†alk 16:23, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - all right all right :P --Gwib^-(talk)- 16:23, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Seems very well referenced, good length, red links count is fine. Good work everyone! ^_^ -- RyanCross (talk) 22:46, 6 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Fine with me. Cheers, Razor flame 02:55, 8 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Weak oppose - I'll happily change to {{support}}, but I look for around 15,000 bytes in a VG article and this one has only 13,000 bytes. --Gwib^-(talk)- 21:14, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Cool, appreciate that but you know you're voting against the criteria, right? This meets the requirements. But I'll do my best.... The Rambling Man (talk) 22:55, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Try to find more info, Gwib told me that also with Charles Spurgeon, now Spurgeon is almost twice as long. You will, as was I, be amazed what you can add if you really dig. Cheers -- America ^†alk 23:00, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

“	I know, but more information is always a good thing. Don't see the VG article criteria as deadlines. Rather see them as things to be achieved and then further developed.	”
—What I told American Eagle on a section of my talk page

--Gwib^-(talk)- 09:32, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Expanded now. Bear in mind that Hantuchova is only 25 years old! The Rambling Man (talk) 11:13, 5 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

TRM: I would highly advise that these articles go through the GA system first. Not that the article is bad, but articles that go slowly through will often be made much better than a rush-through. But not it is bad, but it probably get better treatment if it was a GA first. Cheers -- America ^†alk 17:38, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the advice but since the article pretty much meets all ten criteria for VGA I see no point in leaving it to suffer in the GA backlog. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:25, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I think it's fine to be here, but it's difficult to look at two articles about woman tennis players at the same time. Ivanović should finish soon, so it will easier then. Hippopotamus (talk) 14:08, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Funny, I guessed it would be easier since you could take what you learned and understood to be missing from the Ivanović article and bring it to the Hantuchova article. Still, happy to wait and see what folks think! The Rambling Man (talk) 16:44, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - It's probably just me. My first impressions...
      - I'd perhaps just say she was in Sony advert rather than naming it, as I'm assuming the campaign name plays on a double-meaning of shot, which is less apparent in Simple English.
        Removed, which makes it simpler. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - Simple I'd try to simplify "Partners for Success," "Newcomer of the Year," and "Most Improved Player of the Year."
        Since they're proper titles it's impossible to make them simpler, unless you can suggest something? The Rambling Man (talk) 19:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        You can explain that she won awards for being best new player and for improving. The proper titles don't add too much, it's what the awards were really for is important, if that makes sense. Hippopotamus (talk) 01:21, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        Simplified! The Rambling Man (talk) 06:58, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - The first sentence of "Personal life" is too long, and it also could be read that it is Hantuchová who is interested in poisons and not her mother. I would split into one sentence about the father and one about the mother.
        Hugely simplified this so hopefully it'll work for you better now! The Rambling Man (talk) 19:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        Did it say earlier her mother was a scientist - if this is so, it should be put back into the sentence. Otherwise, very good. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 19:45, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        Well, at the moment it says "Hantuchová's parents are both scientists." before going on to describe what they do. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:59, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        Duh! Sorry, I was about to write a comment when I saw that you said you'd changed it. Then I re-read it too quickly. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 20:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - You could also split the last sentence of "Professional career" into two.
        Split per your recommendation. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - Wikilink "earned" again and maybe add "tournament" to the end of the caption of the top picture (could also be done for Ivanović).
        Changed to "won" which is much simpler and added tournament to both captions (here and Ana). The Rambling Man (talk) 19:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hippopotamus (talk) 19:02, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for your comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:12, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Look at ref 1. It is to back up her ranking of 10th, but the website says 12th, previously 10th. This needs updating. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 07:13, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah, fixed, good spot - it probably changed after Wimbledon.. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:17, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Good, thanks. All other cites look fine so far. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 07:19, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Thanks for doing such a thorough check! The Rambling Man (talk) 07:20, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - No Trouble, I've also update the access date for that ref. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 07:22, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Just a few minor notes;
- "Hantuchová's parents got divorced in 2003.[3] So when Hantuchová lost weight, people became worried she was too thin.[2]" - I'm confused as to what relation the two sentences have to one another.
  - I've rephrased it, hopefully it makes more sense. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:54, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- "can play well when close to the net" - the "net" link doesn't talk about tennis.
  - I've linked out to wikt:net now. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:54, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - That's not the best link either. But the English WP doesn't have a tennis net article either, so shrug. —Giggy 09:01, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - Does the word net have to appear like this: "wikt:net", can't it be like this: "net", as it would make reading much simpler and easier. otherwise some people might think "wikt" it has some article relevance. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 14:34, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I also made a few rewords that you're welcome to revert if you disagree with. —Giggy 08:17, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Great, they're all good thanks. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:54, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Still cannot be compared to the EN Wikipedia version. Although many sources are stated, the article still lacks content. Try adding more info from the EN Wikipedia, and simplifying it before it becomes a VGA. I think it is good, but there many others like this, and they are not ":very good", so I don't see why this article should be considered very good. Prime Contributer (talk) 09:50, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Comparison the en-wiki version is not one of the criteria. As far as content is concerned, the article covers all major aspects of her life and career, as required by VGA criterion 2. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:06, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      - Obviously enwiki will be longer and more complicated. That is why this is simplewiki. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 21:50, 4 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ana Ivanović

Vote started: June 26, 2008, Vote ended: July 3, 2008

Result - passed (unanimous support)

Support

Support. Looks good, satisfies all criterons. A See Also section, prehaps? Microchip 18:18, Thursday, June 26 2008 Utc

Oh,

Hold on. Maybe expand the lead? Microchip 18:21, Thursday, June 26 2008 Utc

Worked on it - let me know how it looks. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:32, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

And so we must come to...

Support. Yay. Microchip 19:07, Thursday, June 26 2008 Utc

Support --Gwib^-(talk)- 20:46, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Pretty good, after some cleanup (yes, other editors did work on it), it looks pretty good. We could get two new VGA this week, cool. Well done -- America ^†alk 21:44, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support; took a look over it and fixed the only issue I could find. —Giggy 11:05, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support --Johney (talk) 11:16, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - No issues at all. Very well written article that is well referenced and simplified. I see no problems when I read over the article. Good luck! ;) -- RyanCross (talk) 11:21, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Maybe just add a Wiktionary link for "earned", but apart from that it looks good. Hippopotamus (talk) 14:02, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I've wiktionary linked out to wikt:pay because that article exists while wikt:earn doesn't. Thanks for your help and support. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:36, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Looks good. - tholly ^--Turnip-- 17:42, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Agreed, nice article. ← κεηηε∂γ ^(talk) 10:02, 3 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Comments

Just a bit of self-promotion, English Wikipedia's article on Ana has 8 citations, Simple English Wikipedia's article has 32, all correctly formatted. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:17, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm expecting you to go add now... Microchip 18:21, Thursday, June 26 2008 Utc
  - Heh, I'm focused on Simple English Wikipedia right now. We should have loads more VGA (and GA) articles than we currently have. The en-wiki article is a complete mess, mostly unreferenced and looks awful. I hope the article I've created is something we can be proud of. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:36, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, but I must comment. The English version of Charles Spurgeon has NO real references or citations. The Simple version of it has 35 (used 54 times). And I, though not to boast, found every one of them. So as I see you've done to Ivanović, I know how hard it is to do so much research on the same topic. Cheers -- America ^†alk 18:34, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

No doubt, you did a great job. I guess here on Simple Wikipedia we're focused on different subjects. Good work to you. I hope find that my research and article preparation meets the criteria for a VGA. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:36, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The article doesn't meet all ten of the criteria. That is, it does not meet #4, as only three other people have touched it, and TRM has written it entirely himself. Cass andra 18:48, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, well Gwib edited it, and a bot added the interwiki links, that makes two...! It doesn't seem particularly to exclude the article based on the editorial history, but sure, it's one of the criteria. Fancy making some adjustments Cassandra?! And for me, I'd like everyone to consider whether you'd be happy to see this article on the main page. Is it some of Simple English's best work? I understand the current regulations state it must meet the criteria for VGA prescriptively but just because no-one else has made a major edit on it seems a little harsh! The Rambling Man (talk) 18:52, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Give it some time - it says possibly by other editors. And yes, I am going overboard with the voting template, but it does promote discussion by listing lots and lots of possible outcomes. Microchip 19:12, Thursday, June 26 2008 Utc

Cool, no worries Microchip. I'm 100% behind review, comment and improvement. I'd be more than happy for other editors to copyedit, adjust and improve the article. The more the merrier! The Rambling Man (talk) 19:27, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Whoa, whoa there, seems you're...rambling a bit there? ;) There's a reason why I posted a comment, not an oppose. I don't like this criteria any more than you do, as far back as seven weeks ago, but, as Simple is, there has been no discussion about this rule. Not that I've produced anything VGA-worthy to begin wtih, but even if i did I wouldn't submit it because of this rule. Cass andra 19:35, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

But presumably, like en-wiki, "rules" such as that are open for discussion. Anyway, I'm not trying to start a revolution. If this VGA nom fails solely based on the fact that no-one else has edited it significantly besides me, I'll laugh myself silly. If the article is decent quality it should stand on its own. Editorial history (should be) an irrelevance if the community agree it's VGA quality. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:05, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, re-reading criterion 4, we have "The article must have gone through a few revisions, possibly by different editors" - possibly by different editors being the key. So the article didn't fail criterion 4 after all. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:23, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

(unindenting) Some terms might still need linking and explaining; Personally I would have given it a 2 weeks listing without voting periodf, but if peaople think it can improve sufficiently wihin the week that is fine with me. As to the creterion 4, I have pasted the link to the original discussion on the talk page of the article. --Eptalon (talk) 08:46, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well Spurgeon drew no comment at all until the voting started and I felt this article was in a better condition so that's why I went ahead and acting boldly. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:50, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

On the contrary, Spurgeon has been discussed and changed to much since I nominated it, just it wasn't talked about much on this page (see here for what redirects to it). Cheers -- America ^†alk 22:30, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's what I was referring to. No discussion here. And the article contained basic grammar, punctuation and factual errors when it was nominated for voting. All I'm saying is if anyone can make suggestions to improve the article, I'd be more than happy to do it, but otherwise please vote for the article on its merits. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:42, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment:. How tall is she? The article says "very tall" but I can't see her actual height anywhere. Hippopotamus (talk) 18:17, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Now added her height. And thanks for the support. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:53, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Charles Spurgeon

Result: promoted (unanimous support)

Support

Support. Other than a few little copyedits that I had to do, this article is very well referenced, has good comprehension, has very good sentence fluidity, structure, and comprehension, and has a good Other websites section. There was no glaring warnings or errors that I could see in the article, and I believe that it meets VGA standards. Cheers, Razor flame 23:45, 23 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - had no idea this was even up for voting! --Gwib^-(talk)- 15:24, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Very well written! Bstone (talk) 16:21, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - I must commend some of you for your sentencing and copyediting, I didn't do that well at all. I must admit I am rather gitty about this potentially becoming a VGA. Very good job you all. Cheers -- America ^†alk 21:27, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support I am not exactly sure, but this article is much more on the good side. It has a lot of information, at the same time written in Simple English,with good explanations. Cites many sources and has links to other Wikis. A good article indeed. But the bad thing is that there are many other similar articles with this "good" standard. These have not been voted as a VGA, why not? If they are not good enough, this might not be. But to me, they are all good. I am not sure, but I give my support. Good effort! Prime Contributer (talk) 14:16, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Nice job done. Chenzw Talk 14:21, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support Maxim_{(talk | editor review)} 18:04, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Well written. It's nice to see the Simple English Wikipedia improve so much. I hope one day all our articles becomes a WP:VGA. -- RyanCross (talk) 03:59, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - This article went a long way. Let's hope it can become a very good article. Thanks to all those who contributed. --Eptalon (talk) 22:06, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Well done! -- Da Punk '95 talk 22:11, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support --Johney (talk) 11:17, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Looks very good to me. Hippopotamus (talk) 18:05, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Very well done, I enjoyed this version better than the one on EN! --Andrew from NC (talk) 18:28, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose

Comments

I just made a pretty thorough copyedit of the article today, paragraph by paragraph. I found a few factual and grammatical issues which I've corrected and hopefully left it in a better state than I found it. Do let me know if I've inadvertantly wrecked anything! The Rambling Man (talk) 15:44, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Please expand the lead. Maxim_{(talk | editor review)} 18:29, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The lead for WP:VGA should be at least 2 paragraphs long. 1 paragraph is too short to be a VGA. -- RyanCross (talk) 18:33, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Working... -- America ^†alk 18:39, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I added to it and changed to a second paragraph, but Jimi Hendrix and Pope John Paul II don't have two. I just fixed all over-links and did other work, and I'm about to vote. Cheers -- America ^†alk 21:22, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I would argue for rewritting much of the second paragraph of the intro. That entire section should sum up the key points of the article. Trivial information such as the fact that he read up to six books a week should not be included as a key point. Most of the family information is also not key to describing who he was and what he did. For the most part only his mental state/illnesses and his charity are important points in that second paragraph. Also the preached to 10 million people statement should have a reference. -- Creol(talk) 14:10, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I just added a few references to the top, removed his family stuff and replaced it with his controversies with the BUGB and his being at the church for 38 years. What else? Cheers -- America ^†alk 18:13, 26 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Can you flesh out the sections a bit more? They're all only une or two sentences. Maxim_{(talk | editor review)} 23:36, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Moved some stuff around. Is that better? Cheers -- America ^†alk 01:12, 25 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, sure. The second one should be expanded a bit more though. -- RyanCross (talk) 02:16, 25 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I say again, is that better? (expanded lead section) Cheers -- America ^†alk 03:27, 25 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yes it is. There aren't any problems anymore. I already added my support. Good luck! ;) -- RyanCross (talk) 21:59, 28 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Result: Promoted to VGA; all those who voted were in favor of promotion. Congrats folks.--Eptalon (talk) 22:12, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yay. -- America ^†alk 01:11, 2 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]